new story!

I've got a very short story, The Smell of Elsewhere, up at Metazen today. I'm very happy with this - it's an ace lit-zine with lots of good material on there, so if you don't dig mine, have a look through the archives.

7 comments:

dan powell said...

Great short. Loved the pace of the reveal of character in it. Top closing line too.

Valerie O'Riordan said...

Thanks, Dan! Much appreciated.

valerie sirr said...

Nice one! Great ending :)

Valerie O'Riordan said...

Cheers, Valerie! Thanks for reading!

Dan Flynn said...

V,

I really liked the story and especially "the world outside the call-box was iced with cherry buds against a sheet-blue sky." which made me think of William Carlos Williams' ice box plums "that were delicious, so sweet and so cold."

The character's meaty accents made me think of Marje Gunderson and Jerry Lundegaard and others in the Coen brother's film "Fargo".

The whole thing cheered me up because it was so lightheartedly done. However, I think I might have misunderstood some of the references because the story seems to start in the cold yet ends with Ma smiling through the "hot, lazy day." If this is me being dozy and not reading the story properly then fulsome apologies.

Valerie O'Riordan said...

Hi Dan, thanks for reading! I think you've actually caught me out in a slight inconsistency. I think you're reading cold into it because of the word 'iced', which isn't what I meant (I was thinking icing, as in cakes), though I can see where there's room for interpretation but I do talk about cherry buds, which is definitely (as far as I know) more of a spring-time thing, when the story's actually set in the summer... Oops!

Dan Flynn said...

Ah. It was the cherry buds that threw me. I got to thinking that spring in Minnesota (see, I'm hooked on Fargo) might be really cold, situated as it is mid continent. And from a love of the Coen brothers came a misreading of your very witty tale. Ah well, I loved its lyricism nevetheless.